Very clean and fluid. It flowed smoothly as the dialogue was very clean. The tone of the music added to the tenderness of the work. The pictures made the video very much like a uplifting experiential film, like you would see for mission videos,e.g. "climbing Mount Everest.
The bad was that I notice the music just spiked right up when it started. It was very loud, and needs to be made more quiet. I would suggest adding in the scores of organizations that collaborated with Citydays, to have the effects of multiplicity, and maybe an interview from one of the collaborators to get an additional perspective.
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This was a very neat piece. There was really nothing confusing about it. I very much liked the framing of your interview with Cory, because he was not looking directly at the camera and also the setting he was shot at with glass doors to his left and students passing by seemed like a public setting, which matches the topic of CityDays. In contrast, Noam’s interview framing was not as attractive as the walls behind him had notifications on them, and there was a Recycle bin and exit door in the background. I would say to keep up with the cleanliness in your style, choose your interview framings more carefully for the rest of the students you will shoot. It would be cool to have a series of students respond to the same questions in a public setting, with people passing by them, to emphasize the topic of CityDays, which is public.
The pictures definitely added to the sense of what CityDays is. Having more of them would be great. Also, I thought that the piece could be more persuasive if the numbers of students and statistics about CityDays were put up in text on screen to let them stand out. Finally, to improve with the persuasion, I would say put more serious melodies in the background when the talk gets serious.
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